T4-+Critical+Responce

BrainStorm on mum.


 * 1) About how she was funny
 * 2) About how she helped out her friends / family
 * 3) How she was resourceful
 * 4) Doesn’t care what people think
 * 5) how she was embarrassing
 * 6) how caring she is


 * Teacher comment**

==== This is a well written Critical Response. You have clearly identified different character traits that represent 'Mum' and given evidence from the text to back up your judgements. An attempt has been made to use paragraphing however some ideas cross over or do not link clearly with main idea of paragraph. Keep working hard Harrison, you are making good progress with your writing. ====

In this short story it used to be green once by Patricia Grace an interesting character was mum.

Mum is a very different mum she is different to most mums because she is really out of fashion because she wears funny clothes and hats but she also wears very ugly hats. She also drives a really crappy car that has no brakes.

In this story there was an interesting character that was Mum. Mum really stood out to me in this story because she was really funny she would always shame out the kids and she was using humor to be strict she would yell out down the drive way from the porch so every one could hear her yelling at the kids to go to school so they could learn. In the story mum would help out her friends by going to the super market and buying there food for them in her run down car with no brakes. She would yell out the window of the car who wants groceries.

Mum is resource full because she cuts up old swim suits and makes them a 2 piece togs for the girls and just keep the bottom for the boys. She also has a car with no brakes it is so cruddy but she keeps using it and she is not ashamed.

Mum was not a type of person who takes what people say to her to heart because she wears funny cloths and has a really bad car. She was cheeky towards the law. She had no registration,wof or brakes.

“We were all ashamed of Mum” to get us out of bed she would drag us all down the hall to the lino and pull down our panties and set our bums on the hard cold lino. She would also yell at us to go to school the kids didn't want to go to school because mum had cut out the rotten bits out in there apples because there dad brings home over ripe apples.

Mum is a really cool person she uses humor to be strict. She really stood out in the story as the main character is was a really funny story overall I really liked it.